Is it important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, globalisation has opened many opportunities to level up people’s
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life
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in
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personal and professional.
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, they should take
risks
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as requirements to
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career advancement in
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the workplace
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workplace
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and have good resilience and adaptability in their
life
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essay will elaborate
how
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important people
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risks
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in evolving
the
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quality of
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. People’s demand
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basic needs, like property and
grocery
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become higher time by time as high as goods
price
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in
global
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market.
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situation encourages people to have
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hours,
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it enables them to get career advancement
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earning
higher
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a higher
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salary. That condition must be supported with good professional development,
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as international professional training which takes much money, time, and effort. Unfortunately, those sacrifices will not guarantee the workers to
be
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level up from their job position, especially in big or multinational companies.
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because
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a high-competitive skill among employees on performance.
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, in a bad case, they could get field in promotion.
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, even though workers experience unselected
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promotion
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, they will become certified international well-trained
employee
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employees
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as they
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attention
on
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to
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professional development, as their
risks
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.
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another chance, if there is a good opportunity in other companies which offer higher
salary
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, they probably will be selected easily. It is
same
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important in
personal
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life
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as well. Every person must have
a
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good resilience and adaptability in
globalisation
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the globalisation
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era. Those survival skills have to
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by taking some
risks
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like
travel
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travelling
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and
live
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living
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alone in a
country
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.
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, International students have to travel and live in another
country
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just by themselves. They must learn a new language and survive
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the weather
condition
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conditions
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which
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extremely different from
origin
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the origin
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country
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.
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, they might have social
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problems
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like
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a language
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barrier, or get sick because of extreme weather. But, if students are able to tackle the situation, they
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elevate their personal skills in social, rather than
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just
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living
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in their
country
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and
do
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not
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taking
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any
risk
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risks
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. In conclusion, taking
risks
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in professional development to
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career advancement and in personal
life
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to build good resilience and adaptability are important.
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is because globalisation requires good personal and professional skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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