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Some people feel that the government should pay the costs of running universities so that a university education will be free for anyone who wants it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some
people
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 may argue that
government
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 should not provide funding for
universities
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, as
government
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the government
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 should spend it on
the
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apply
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other facilities
such
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 as public transportation or medication
instead
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.
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, the advantages that society might receive from the government giving budgets to schools can yield far outweigh these disadvantages, the most noteworthy of these benefits
being
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 how they can give opportunities to those who cannot afford
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universities'
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universities
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 courses and how they can improve individuals'
quality
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 of life. Providing budgets to colleges can reduce the number of students that
could not
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cannot
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 afford the
universities
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' courses, so they have a chance to study. As
financial
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the financial
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 stability of each family is not as equal to each other, some
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teenagers have to abandon their dreams to study
in
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at
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universities
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 because their families cannot support them.
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, in Thailand, the majority of students have , as of late, been dumped out of
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 system
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 poverty. Alongside
this
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, giving funding to schools can help improve
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people
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people's
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quality
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 of life.
As receiving
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 a good
quality
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of
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education can help
people
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 to have more chances in seeking
for
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apply
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their careers. In conclusion, providing money to
universities
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 might seem to waste
money
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of money
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, though its merits that it can benefit the students who cannot afford application
fee
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 and better
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people
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quality
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 of life are perhaps
most
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the most
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 important
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government funding
  • equitable education system
  • social mobility
  • talented individuals
  • higher education
  • prioritize
  • sustainable
  • alternative sources of funding
  • partnerships with businesses
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