The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
The two graphs provide public
the
information Correct article usage
apply
of
the total Change preposition
on
number
of employees working in six different sectors both male and female in the Republic of Freedonia in 1975 and 1995.
Overall
, In 1975 the total number
of men
was higher than of
women in every Correct pronoun usage
that of
sector
while
,
Remove the comma
apply
both
communications and wholesale & retail trade sectors there was a significant increase in the Change preposition
in both
number
of women employees in 1995. However
, the number
of employee
Change to a plural noun
employees
are in
1000.
Verb problem
is
According to
the line charts, the number
of working female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
was
rose drastically in Unnecessary verb
apply
communications
Correct article usage
the communications
sector
from around 270 to 550 in 1975 and 1995 respectively. Moreover
, female employees in wholesale & retail
trade followed the same trend and Correct word choice
and retail
goes
Wrong verb form
went
upto
almost 800 Correct your spelling
up to
surpassed
the Wrong verb form
surpassing
men
. Furthermore
, finance sector
female workers steady
reached Change the word
steadily
at
the same level Change preposition
apply
of
working Change preposition
as
men
which was nearly 330 in 1995.
Unfortunately,Correct article usage
the
sector
(defence) had very slight changes women reached around 100 but men
came at
200. Despite, the period of 20 years total Change preposition
to
employee
in both Fix the agreement mistake
employees
manufacturing
Correct article usage
the manufacturing
sector
and public sector
(non-defence) remain almost unchaged
.Correct your spelling
unchanged
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, men, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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