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The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
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The two graphs provide
the
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information
of
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 the total
number
 of employees working in six different sectors both male and female in the Republic of Freedonia in 1975 and 1995.
Overall
, In 1975 the total
number
 of
men
 was higher than
of
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that of
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 women in every
sector
while
,
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both
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in both
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 communications and wholesale & retail trade sectors there was a significant increase in the
number
 of women employees in 1995.
However
, the
number
 of
employee
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employees
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are in
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is
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 1000.
According to
 the line charts, the
number
 of working
female
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females
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was
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rose drastically in
communications
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the communications
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sector
 from around 270 to 550 in 1975 and 1995 respectively.
Moreover
, female employees in wholesale &
retail
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and retail
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 trade followed the same trend and
goes
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went
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upto
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up to
 almost 800
surpassed
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surpassing
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 the
men
 .
Furthermore
, finance
sector
 female workers
steady
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steadily
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 reached
at
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the same level
of
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as
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 working
men
 which was nearly 330 in 1995. Unfortunately,
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the
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public
sector
 (defence) had very slight changes women reached around 100 but
men
 came
at
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to
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 200. Despite, the period of 20 years total
employee
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employees
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 in both
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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sector
 and public
sector
 (non-defence) remain almost
unchaged
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unchanged
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, men, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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