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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990. 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives us information about the manufacturers of
milk
 in the
Netherlands
, Australia,
Tanzania
, and
Guatemala
, commencing 1990 to 2010.
Overall
, the
Netherlands
 was the highest
contributer
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contributor
 in the
milk
 factories sector throughout the periods of time, compared to
Guatemala
. From the data, two of the highest
milk
 production countries are the
Netherlands
 and Australia, both experienced their biggest numbers which were around 11,500,000
litres
milk
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of milk
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. Before reached its peak, the
Netherlands
 had a fluctuation in its trend,
started
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starting
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by
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with
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 11,262,000 bottles of
milk
,
subsequently
 had a slight decrease 10 years later, resulting
about
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in about
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 a hundred thousand
litres
 of
lost
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loss
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. In comparison, Australia has receding in its trend
at the end
 of the period,
hitted
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hitting
 approximately 9,200 thousand
milk
.
On the other hand
, the
Tanzania
 and
Guatemala
milk
 productions remained steady growth.
Despite
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Despite this
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, there were several interesting trends within both countries. In 1990, the
milk
 manufacturers in
Tanzania
 tripled
the
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apply
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Guatemala
's before
doubled
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doubling
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 it again
in
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apply
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a decade later,
reached
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reaching
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 around 1,42,000 and 55,000 respectively. In 2010, the
Tanzania
milk
 factories
were
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added only about 10k
litres
,
while
Guatemala
 climbed just over 80k
litres
 of
milk
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, netherlands, tanzania, guatemala, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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