People feel that educational success is dependent on having a good teacher, others say it depends on the attitude of the student. Discuss both side and state your opinion*

Many individuals agree that a good
teacher
has a major impact on a student's education. Some beg to differ and agree that an individual's education
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solely based on the student's eagerness to learn. I will state my views on
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essay below. The most significant aspect
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education is the process of learning. Learning involves receiving knowledge and
inisghts
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insights
from various sources
such
as
teacher
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,
literatures
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literature
kinds of literature
pieces of literature
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,
internet
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and many more. Many believe that experience is the best
teacher
and
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act of learning is not limited to only just studying with a
teacher
.
Therefore
they agree that the involvement of
teacher
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teachers
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in
one
's educational success is not truly significant.
However
, most individuals agree that studying with a
teacher
is the most effective form of learning and that most knowledge
are
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recieved
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received
through studies in school rather
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experience. Some individuals are not able to learn properly without
a
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proper
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from a
teacher
. Most subjects are
also
simply difficult to learn individually without guidance from someone who
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professional and educated.
Hence
, the presence of a great
teacher
is highly significant to their studies.
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, I believe that even a great
teacher
are
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not capable
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someone
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refuses to learn.
One
also
cannot obtain knowledge from their experience, if they refuse to learn from it.
Therefore
, it is important to emphasize that learning involves
one
side who
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are
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willing to learn and
one
side
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willing to give.
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Task Achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the task with a balanced approach. While you have presented a discussion looking at both sides, your personal opinion could be clearer and more thoroughly supported with clear, relevant examples.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize ideas clearly into paragraphs, and ensure each paragraph has a central topic that is developed. Use a range of cohesive devices to manage the progression of your essay more effectively. The essay requires a better-defined structure for it to flow naturally.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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