The maps below show the village Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.

The maps below show the village Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.
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, it can be seen the soaring
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house number in the central segment of the second map, meanwhile disappearing of the farmlands on the Northeast and Southwest sides. In
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third decade of the
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there were many farmyards in Stokeford village which were placed in the Northeast and Southwest areas. The central part was occupied by mixed households, shops and the Post office. Opposite
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local school and Gardens with a Large house were located. During 80 years many changes happened in
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, the number of houses increased almost four times, because new buildings were added in the central area and the southwest between the river and road. Houses appeared in the Northwest as well. In both mentioned places farmyards totally disappeared. Shops were removed,
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retirement home
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a bigger size.
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  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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