In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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World news has told us that fast

food

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a common

snacks

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is really popular and well-known to everyone at

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present

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. But it

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gives us lots of

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about

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people

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's diseases which

caused

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from

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that kind of

foods

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food

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overweight

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being overweight

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, heart disease,... And an idea for "should

goverments

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governments

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impose

high

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tax

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the

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junk

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idea,

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are many advantages for

people

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when they get higher

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tax

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for fast

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ensure all main meals in the day and avoid

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too much waste nutrions like protein, fat,

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and cholesterol

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makes

people

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easy

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to control their weight and size. It

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improve

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people

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health,

protect

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their

body

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bodies

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from fast

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food's

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food

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dieases

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diseases

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and

problem

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problems

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about

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nutrious in

body

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the body

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, it is important and reasonable for

people

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nowaday

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nowadays

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it can save our

moeny

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money

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from

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"bad" fast

food

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instead

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people

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balance their

meal

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meals

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healthy

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healthily

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and effectively by main rich

nutrious

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nutritious

products fish, milk, eggs, pork and beef

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...

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It improves our

life

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to be

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apply

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fresh

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and

strong

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stronger

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, about the negative aspects, fast

food

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seem

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to be

teenager's

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and

lacked

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time

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people

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food

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just because of the

convinience

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convenience

and mostly cheap. If

goverments

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governments

government

increase the tax, it

caused

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causes

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some

problem

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problems

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with some types of

people

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in society.

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there are

less

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fewer

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teenagers

can

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who can

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enjoy their "quick"

meal

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meals

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to on

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at school or work, or less "small"

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meals

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for

people

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for their busy

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As well as

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apply

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may be

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maybe

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many

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much

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fast

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food

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foods

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is a traditional

food

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country

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the country

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which shows

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the country's

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cultural

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and

foods'

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foods

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styles that customers or tourists can't really enjoy

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apply

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with

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a taxed price. It caused some

problem

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problems

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people

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people's

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daily

life

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lives

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and eating

habitat

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habits

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, maybe it

impact

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impacted

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apply

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the tradition too. There are two sides of my view, and my

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conclusion

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little

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disgaree

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disagree

with

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idea because I think that not by using the higher tax,

people

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can

also

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consume fast

food

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effectly

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effectively

by cutting down slowly that

food

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your

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their

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eating habit and improve more

nutrious

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nutritious

meal

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meals

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regularly. It

also

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give

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gives

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us a

health

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healthy

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life.

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task achievement

Ensure a clear position throughout the response. It appears unclear in places, which can leave the reader confused about your overall stance on the given topic.

task achievement

Develop paragraphs fully to address the task prompt. Some paragraphs appear underdeveloped and do not fully explore the implications or nuances of imposing a higher tax on fast food.

task achievement

Include more relevant examples and supporting details to strengthen your arguments. This is essential for both agreeing and disagreeing with the statement.

coherence cohesion

Organize ideas and information clearly into well-planned paragraphs. Use a variety of cohesive devices to better link ideas within and across paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

Pay close attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar. Errors can detract from the reader's ability to understand the points being made.

coherence cohesion

Begin and end the essay with clear introductory and conclusive statements. This frames the essay and gives the reader a clear indication of the essay structure and writer's position.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

362 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
obesity
diabetes
heart disease
health outcomes
healthcare costs
consumer behavior
socio-economic backgrounds
ethical implications
public health campaigns
subsidies
regulations
nutritional content
healthier food options
government intervention

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