Today, more people are waiting until their thirties to get married and have children. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, there have been numerous
people
getting married and having
children
in their thirties rather than
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young
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age. As
such
, there are merits and demerits in
this
alteration,
although
I opine
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that
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merits outweigh the demerits. In my view, getting
marriage
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and building
family
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are serious matters that need
financially stable
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and individual growth. Late marriages and parenthood offer more time to build
good
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foundation before starting a family. In
this
essay, I will examine all the relevant opinions based on factual premises. There are several arguments, the most prominent one is that getting married and becoming
parents
must provide better
financially
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stability for
children
. To pursue all of
this
,
people
must establish their
career
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and have stable
income
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.
For example
, if
people
want to have
children
, they must prepare everything that their
children
need in the future.
In addition
,
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marriage and childbirth can give more
oppotunities
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opportunities
to pursue personal goals and education,
thus
after marrying they can be more
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on their
children
and family's goals.
On the other hand
, delaying marriage and childbirth can
be reducing
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the
posibility
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possibility
to have
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of having
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a
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children
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children
in the future because of decreasing fertility.
Moreover
, other health problems and risks to mother and child.
In addition
, having
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child
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in
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might be difficult to match the energy with
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children
and potentially lack of bonding between
parents
and
children
.
Hence
,
children
might
be feeling
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ignored and less loved
from
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their
parents
. In conclusion, tying
a
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knot and having
children
in
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such
young
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age is incredible,
however
, being ready and steady
as
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physically, mentally, and financially are important to have
a
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excellent family. In my opinion, getting married late
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numerous
beneficial
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to
people
as an individual or as
parents
in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • matrimonial timing
  • fertility issues
  • career-oriented
  • financial security
  • societal norms
  • generational divide
  • personal fulfillment
  • personality development
  • biological clock
  • extended adolescence
  • family planning
  • child rearing
  • socioeconomic factors
  • traditional milestones
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