You live in Ho Chi Minh city. You just took a trip to Ha Long Bay with an English friend named Daisy. You received an email from her after she returned to London. Read part of her email below. Write a reply to Daisy. In your email, you have to tell her that you really like the photos and the time you got together, describe a problem you had at the airport to her and suggest the time and place for the next trip. You should write at least 120 words.

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Dear Daisy, I am writing to thank you for writing

this

letter to me about Our

trip

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Ha Long Bay, it was a very wonderful memory during our

trip

. I really like the photo we got in Ha Long Bay, it's a photo with many beautiful scenes of nature in the background. And especially I really appreciate the time we

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together, those are the beautiful memories that

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accompanied you on that

trip

, we ate together, went out together, talked together and happily explored the

trip

together. After finishing the

trip

and arriving at the airport, I had a problem with the flight being delayed. I waited for a long time and was explained a lot by the staff. The wait took about a few hours but

then

I got Board your flight and get home safely. I look forward to taking another

trip

with you

this

spring. I will plan that

trip

, I think we will go to Da Lat city, it is a beautiful city and great in terms of scenery and other activities. I hope to see you on that

trip

. Give your thanks. Le Huy Gia Hoang

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

193 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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