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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph demonstrates the
amount
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 of
money
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 in US
dollars
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 (millions) spent on
books
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 in
Germany
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, France, Italy and
Austria
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 from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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, over the 10-year period,
Germany
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 spent the most
money
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 on
books
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while
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Austria
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initially
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 started with the least
money
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 spent on
books
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, it had a consistent increase from 2001, spending more
money
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 by 2005 than Italy. As seen from the line graph, the two countries with the highest
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on
books
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 from 1995 to 2005 are
Germany
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 and France.
Germany
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 remains at the highest place, with its peak in 2005 with the total
amount
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 of approximately 95 million
dollars
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 spent on
books
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.
On the other hand
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, France
also
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 peaked in 2005 with nearly 70 million
dollars
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 spent on
books
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.
On the contrary
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, the two nations with the least
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on
books
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 are Italy and
Austria
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.
Although
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Austria
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 started as the nation with the least
money
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 spent, it has a gradual increase from 2001, taking over Italy in around 2002. It can be seen from the line graph that Italy remain consistent with its spending on
books
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 with the highest peak in 2005 at around 60 million
dollars
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 spent.

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