the maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.

the maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.
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two floor
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plans of one trade conference held between 2009 to 2010.
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,
it is clear that
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the changes of one trade conference held to reducing seats and adding balcony with
lougue
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lounge
league
area
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. Moving for more details, the meeting room moved to
concert
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the concert
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hall.
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, the exhibition
area
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had changed to
stage
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and registration
area
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. By the same token, the main entrance and side entrance had similar
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during the period. Regarding
to
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the floor plans in 2010, there
are
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several movements of the trade conference held.
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, the refreshment place place had changed by registration.
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, the exhibition
area
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was moved from
concert
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the concert
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and
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stage.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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