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Band 1

The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?c

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An absolute consensus can hardly be reached
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 the government provide relief
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 each people. As far as
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 partly agree with that. It has just admitted that the basic revenue
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 to improve the stability of society. To be specific, the
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 income, as
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 origin of extra wages, can alleviate the financial burden for
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illegal
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. Meanwhile, It is a common practice that people have no alternative but to commit crimes
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 the absence of specific skills to earn a living.
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resentment and equalize the gap between rich and poor, the
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 more stable.
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, if the government do not set up the threshold for all citizens, it equal
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introduction conclusion present
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal Basic Income (UBI)
  • Social welfare
  • Economic sustainability
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Labor market
  • Financial security
  • Incentive structures
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Welfare dependency
  • Social solidarity
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Automation
  • Workforce displacement
  • State-funded
  • Taxation policies
  • Income disparity
  • Economic inequality
  • Social safety net
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