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The table below gives information about past and projected population figures in various countries for different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about past and projected population figures in various countries for different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows
previous
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the previous
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years
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years'
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population
 and
estimated
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an estimated
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population
 in the future from different destinations.
Overall
, the
number of
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apply
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population
 has been increasing since 1993
of
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in
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 all regions
whereas
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 is the country which shows
highest
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the highest
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 figure
while
 the lowest number and lowest growth rate
is
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are
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 calculated in New
zealand
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Zealand
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 from 1993 to 2020
andalso
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and also
 the projected
population
.
United
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The United
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states
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States
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 recorded 249.9m of people in 1993
and
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apply
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which significantly increased to 320.6 in 2020.
Furthermore
,
which
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it
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 might be estimated to
349
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be 349
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m in 2050.
Secondly
, Canada is the second largest
population
 recorded as shown
as
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in the table which shows 26.6m of human beings at the
begining
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beginning
 which
also
 escalated
into
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to
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 36.9m in 2020.
And
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Also
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also
, it is estimated that 39m in 2050. Australia shows
third
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the third
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 highest
population
whereas
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apply
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it
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apply
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recorded
17.1
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at 17.1
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m and continued to grow and reached
to
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22.7m in 2020 and
projected
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is projected
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 26m in 2050 followed by New
zealand
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Zealand
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whereas
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with
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lowest
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the lowest
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 number of people recorded and growth rate that were 3.4m at the start of the calculation.
Moreover
, the growth of people in New
zealand
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Zealand
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 reached
at
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a
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their
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its
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 maximum of 4.3m in 2020 which
also
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is also
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 estimated 4.7m in 2050.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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