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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.
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It is reported by the line graph that there were changing
complaints
 from the people in the City of Newton about the Environmental health authorities. The data is presented in the number of
complaints
 biennially from 1980 until 1996. By and large, road works, traffic
noise
 and factories had an increasing number of
complaints
.
On the other hand
, there was a
declined
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 in the
rates
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rate
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 of people complaining about household issues.
According to
 statistical data
of
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 different environmental
compliments
, the highest
compliments
 came from road works issues.
However
, it remained static in three periods of time (1980, 1982 and 1984) which were around 450
complaints
.
Then
, in 1988 it increased dramatically from 400 to more than 1200
complaints
. Meanwhile, the number of filed
complaints
 from factories was
also
 higher than traffic
noise
 which started from 400 to almost 650
compliments
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complaints
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. But in 1988, there was a significant growth
of
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 traffic
noise
 which accounted for 200 to 600 numbers of
compliments
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complaints
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.
On the other hand
, it was reported by the line graph that the least complained
noise
 contributor to the environmental authorities came from household issues. Based on the data, it showed a slight decrease during the period of time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, noise, compliments with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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