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The cart below show the temperature and rainfall in equatorial climate and mmediterranean climate.

The charts illustrate the temperature and
rainfall
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 in equatorial and Mediterranean climates between January and
December
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. Units are measured in Cu mm and degrees Celsius.
Overall
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,
rainfall
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 experienced an upward trend, and temperatures remained in the equatorial
climate
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.
while
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 both had some fluctuations in the Mediterranean
climate
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. In an equatorial
climate
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,
rainfall
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 recorded its highest level in
December
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 by over 250 mm.
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 there was a small dip from February to October, the values remained unchanged. The temperature of the equatorial
climate
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 has remained almost the same throughout the year.
On the other hand
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,
rainfall
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 in the Mediterranean
climate
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 had its highest level in January and
December
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,
whereas
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 from April to October, it reported a lower level.
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,temperature rocketed up until August, and it plummeted to a decrease by
December
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 by 20 degrees Celsius.

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