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"Time is money" give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience to what extant do you agree or disagree?

#time #money
Time
 is money and
time
 is gold are
few
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a few
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 statements that show how
valueble
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valuable
time
 is nowadays.
i
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I
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 agree with
this
 statement because without proper
time
management
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management,
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 it can hinder our
progresssion
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progression
 in
work
 and we will cherish our loved
ones
 more.
Firstly
 ,
time
 is
important
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an important
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 and
a
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crucial aspect we often
overlooked
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 in our daily
life
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lives
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. With
a
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good
time
 planning , our
work
 progression will become smoother and will be on
time
.
For
example
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 before 8 am I need to reach my office and before
that
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that,
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 I need to prepare and get ready for
work
. It needs a proper planning of
time
 in order for me to reach office on
time
. If
i'm
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I'm
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 late waking up ,
i'll
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I'll
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 be late for
work
 and
this
 will affect my
work
 and
others
. Our poor
time
 management can affect
others
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others'
other's
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work
 if it involves a teamwork job , and
this
 will give
bad
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a bad
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 impression
of
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others
 to
us
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apply
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.
Morever
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Moreover
, as
time
 passes by , our loved
ones
 are getting older as we grow. Moments with them are something that we should cherish and feel grateful about.
Time
 is a valuable thing that we should spend
for
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with
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 our loved
ones
 as we
dont
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don't
 know when the
time
 will come for them .
For instance
,
for
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some who
has
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have
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 lost their loved
ones
 will give out everything just to be with them again. Value and appreciate their presence if you still have a chance to do it. In conclusion,
time
 is everything be it in your
work
 or with your loved
ones
 . People with
a
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apply
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good
time
 planning will ease
others
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others'
other's
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work
 and who appreciate their loved
ones
 will cherish and appreciate them more in a good way.
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task achievement
To improve your task achievement score, ensure that you fully address all parts of the question. While you have presented a general agreement with the statement 'Time is money', you have not developed a balanced argument considering the extent to which you agree or disagree. Including a paragraph that discusses the other side of the argument, or nuances your support, can help round out the response.
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You can enhance the coherence and cohesion of your essay by paying careful attention to paragraphing. Use clear and distinct paragraphs for each main point. Transitions between these points should be smooth, using a variety of linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument. Moreover, ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea that is developed adequately.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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