Some people think individuals are more and more dependent on each other. Some people think individuals are more and more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
With the progress of human wisdom and the advance of scientific technology, it seems that the dependence among
people
is decreasing. However
, people
hold different opinions about this
.
Some people
think that individuals are increasingly inclined to rely on each other. One main reason in favour of this
view is that a person needs help from others
to spend a day delightedly. For example
, the transportation and meals of workers in metropolises where dwellers lead a fast-paced life source from the assistance of specialised personnel, including drivers, cooks and even delivery staff. On the contrary
, people
in the past often walked or biked by themselves to the workplace and cooked by themselves, less depending on others
. Besides
, it is common for today's people
to face some challenges in their personal and professional lives. For instance
, buying a flat in a city, which is often expensive and beyond their purchasing ability, is rather difficult for young adults, they will generally rely on their parents to pay a deposit or mortgage.
On the other hand
, others
believe that there is much self-reliance among people
. People
are less likely to ask for help from others
because scientific machines can give them plenty of support. One example is that a pregnant female can do much housework with the help of household appliances, such
as washing machines and microwave ovens, and thus
it is unnecessary for her to depend on her husband. By contrast
, without these advanced products, people
would depend much on others
, similar to their counterparts in previous years. But, they should ignore that these devices are invented by other people
-- scientists.
In conclusion, I tend to agree that individuals are liable to rely on each other, due to
the fast-paced life and enormous pressure from work and life.Submitted by 1378468145 on
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