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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and governments can make a difference. What extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some people contend that only big businesses and governments can effectively improve the
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 and that individuals are powerless to do so. I am totally against
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 viewpoint. It is undeniable that the efforts of big businesses and the government greatly enhance the
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. Through their platforms and actions, public figures and benefactors have the ability to sway public opinion and spark a compassion for environmental conservation. The implementation of environmental laws by closely observing business establishments' compliance, climate change movements, and inspiring a large number of people to plant trees and clean up the oceans are just a few of the noteworthy environmental projects they have created. Even in the face of attempts by the government and corporations, an individual can still have a genuine impact on
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society and legitimately hold the capacity to better the
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. Regardless of
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, gender, age, socioeconomic standing, or religious affiliation, everyone has a sincere desire to preserve and enhance their
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, particularly if it is where they now reside. Any private person can start campaigns to protect or enhance their
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 by planning clean-up drives,
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 beautification projects, garbage segregation initiatives, and
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 events. These groups can include educators, students, workers, and concerned citizens. People in the community work together to enhance not just the area in which they live but
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 their interpersonal connections. They enhance the work of big businesses and the government, improving living conditions worldwide.
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