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The two maps below shows an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The two maps below shows an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two maps describe how an
island
 transforms after some tourist facilities have been constructed. Generally, the
island
 experiences a large improvement with more facilities to attract visitors. Before the construction,
in
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on
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 the
east-side
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east side
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 of the
island
, there is a small beach
,
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 and some coconut trees. In the
center
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centre
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 of the
island
, the land is empty
while
in
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on
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 the
west-side
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west side
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, there are some coconut trees grown.
Moreover
, a
vacant-land
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vacant land
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 can
also
 be found here.
In contrast
, the second picture refers to the development of the
island
 that provides some infrastructures for tourists to visit. The infrastructures are built in the
center
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 of the
island
 to the western part. The vacant area in the eastern part remains unchanged. On the left side of
this
 area, there are circular houses which are connected by
footpath
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. These houses can
also
 be found
in
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 the
west-side
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west side
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 near the beach.
Furthermore
, the restaurant and the reception building have been added.
In
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 the
south-side
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south side
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 of the reception building, there is
‘T’
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a ‘T’
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 shape pier. These three facilities have vehicle
track
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tracks
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 to connect one another.
Additionally
, the
guest
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guests
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 can indulge themselves in the newly built swimming area.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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