Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The number of
supermarkets
are
quickly increasing in several nations, resulting in local industries cannot compete with them. Some believe that it leads to a great destruction of these small companies. In my view, local people benefit more from local Change the verb form
is
stores
, despite the fact that supermarkets
are more convenient and provide various services.
In recent years, supermarkets
have become the first place where people want to buy everything rather than small grocery stores
. As a consequence
, more and more grocery stores
closed because they had no way to compete with the large business
groups
. The first reason is that large business
groups
have a greater budget to provide various and better services for customers
, thus
the local industries are less attractive to the customers
. For example
, we can buy coffee in most supermarkets
in Taiwan. In contrast
, coffee machines are not a common thing in local stores
. Hence
, the customers
who prefer to have a cup of coffee tend to be appealed by this
service of the supermarkets
.
Secondly
, unlike large business
groups
, local shopkeepers often dedicate all their money in
their own Change preposition
to
stores
; due to
the economic pressure, it is an uphill battle for them to start another business
again if they close their store. On the other hand
, large business
groups
can easily choose another location and start their industries again. This
is a huge disadvantage for the local communities. To give an example, nowadays, we can see more chain supermarkets
in urban areas. On the contrary
, we can find many small businesses in the countryside where the supermarkets
have not expanded to
. Change preposition
apply
This
means that supermarkets
truly affect the lives of local stores
.
In conclusion, supermarkets
give customers
various and better services, yet it is harmful to many small businesses, they may have to find another way to profit nowadays. Moreover
, local people should consume more in these local stores
in order to support them.Submitted by annlin900116 on
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