some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.
People
view marriage
in various ways; a kind of social contract or fruit of love
. It is believed by a select few that choosing a spouse from an economic perspective is better, while
others say marriage
should be based on affection. I strongly believe people
should marry whom they love
. This
essay will demonstrate both views and the reason
why love
should be the baseline of marriage
.
First of all, couples
will meet difficulties and challenges throughout their marriage
, and only the relationship based on love
can make them overcome the adversary. For example
, when wife
or husband loses a lot of Correct article usage
a wife
money
because of his/her business failure, the other encourages the partner to start again and they can get through it. This
is not easy if trust, loyalty, and love
between couples
are not exist
. The stronger relationship between wives and husbands is from Change the verb form
does not exist
love
, not money
.
On the other hand
, some folk says
we are living in Correct subject-verb agreement
say
the
Correct article usage
a
materialism
society, so Replace the word
materialistic
that
Correct word choice
apply
people
should consider partners'
wealth when deciding Correct pronoun usage
their partners'
marriage
. Change preposition
on marriage
For instance
, as housing prices are
soaring recently, Wrong verb form
have been
couples
who marry those who have fortune
are more likely to purchase a house much faster than individuals whose partners do not have enough Correct article usage
a fortune
money
. However
, people
can earn fortune
at once but they can lose all Add an article
a fortune
money
by just one mistake. If your partner loses all the money
he/she has, then
do you abandon your partner for that reason
? Cash should not the
only Add a missing verb
be the
reason
for marriage
.
To conclude
, while
money
is one of the essential things in our lives, marriaged
Correct your spelling
married
marriage
marriages
couples
with love
can achieve or bear everything with their cement
relationship. I firmly believe that Replace the word
cemented
love
should be the first reason
for marriage
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Coherence and Cohesion
While your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that transitions between ideas and paragraphs are smooth and logical.
Task Achievement
Your essay adequately addresses the prompt, ensuring a discussion of both points of view and providing your own opinion; however, strive to expand on examples that are highly relevant and detailed to support your arguments.
