some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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People
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view
marriage
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in various ways; a kind of social contract or fruit of
love
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. It is believed by a select few that choosing a spouse from an economic perspective is better,
while
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others say
marriage
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should be based on affection. I strongly believe
people
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should marry whom they
love
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.
This
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essay will demonstrate both views and the
reason
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why
love
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should be the baseline of
marriage
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. First of all,
couples
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will meet difficulties and challenges throughout their
marriage
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, and only the relationship based on
love
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can make them overcome the adversary.
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, when
wife
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a wife
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or husband loses a lot of
money
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because of his/her business failure, the other encourages the partner to start again and they can get through it.
This
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is not easy if trust, loyalty, and
love
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between
couples
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are not exist
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. The stronger relationship between wives and husbands is from
love
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, not
money
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.
On the other hand
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, some folk
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say
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we are living in
the
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a
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materialism
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materialistic
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society, so
that
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apply
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people
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should consider
partners'
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their partners'
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wealth when deciding
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marriage
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.
For instance
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, as housing prices
are
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have been
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soaring recently,
couples
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who marry those who have
fortune
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a fortune
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are more likely to purchase a house much faster than individuals whose partners do not have enough
money
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.
However
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,
people
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can earn
fortune
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a fortune
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at once but they can lose all
money
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by just one mistake. If your partner loses all the
money
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he/she has,
then
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do you abandon your partner for that
reason
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? Cash should not
the
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only
reason
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for
marriage
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.
To conclude
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,
while
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money
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is one of the essential things in our lives,
marriaged
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married
marriage
marriages
couples
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with
love
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can achieve or bear everything with their
cement
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relationship. I firmly believe that
love
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should be the first
reason
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for
marriage
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.
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