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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 map examines some possible spots for a brand new shopping centre
is
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 going to be built in Brandfield. Not only
the
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 location partly divided into two
area
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 by a river, but
also
 each of the aimed spots
have
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their
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its
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 own uniqueness
as well as
 get surrounded by versatile features. The S1 area, which is planned to be located in
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a nothern
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nothern
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northern
another
 location aims to be centred by various infrastructure
such
 as a city centre, housing estate, road, and railway.
This
 spot is the most strategic one where citizen
do
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 not
need
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 go to the
metroplitan
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metropolitan
 district whenever they need to purchase stuff for their daily needs. More than that, the golf course and park
is establish
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 in the southwest of the future shopping mall which
enrich
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enriches
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the facility
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facility
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facilities
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 around that place.
In contrast
 with S1,
shopping
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a shopping
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 centre in S2 will be constructed in the northeast area where it is closely situated with the only one industrial estate in the city in order to make the distribution of stuff easier.
In addition
, it is obvious to highlight that S2 have some similarities with S1 where both fields will be placed in the midway of a railway and street
in
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aim
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 to be accessible and efficient for
public
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the public
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 to visit either with
a
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apply
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public transportation or their own conveyances.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city planners
  • proposed
  • shopping mall
  • the main features
  • comparisons
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • recommendation
  • site selection
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