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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
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The pictures depict the results of a survey of
education
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 in adult ages. The first bar chart illustrates the reasons why people decide to
study
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 in mature age. The pie chart
preveils
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reveals
prevails
 how
the
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apply
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societies
assumes
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assume
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 the fee of
growth
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growing
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 up
education
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have
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has
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 to have
proportion
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a proportion
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 between
tax payer
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taxpayer
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, employer and individual. first and foremost, Over 35
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percent
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per cent
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 of survey
corespondens
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respondents
agrees
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agree
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proffesionals
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professionals
professional
takes
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take
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 adults
education
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 because they
are interest
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are interested
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 in
subject
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the subject
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 and
also
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 to gain qualifications.
On the other hand
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, reasons to improve
prospect
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the prospect
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 of promotion,
helpful
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be helpful
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 for current job and enjoy learning get 20
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percent
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per cent
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 of
population
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the population
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. Meanwhile, the bottom two
reason
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reasons
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 that does not reach up to 15
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percent
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per cent
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are
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is
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 they hope to able to change jobs and to meet
person
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people
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while
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 they take
education
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.
Secondly
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, the tuition fee should
be divide
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be divided
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 and the student
do
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does
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 not pay 100
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percent
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per cent
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. People's opinion government has
certain
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a certain
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 amount from
taxpayer
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taxpayers
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 to
alocate
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allocate
locate
 money for their
study
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cost
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costs
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,
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the
an
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ideal
of
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apply
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this
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 percentage
around
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is around
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 25%. Not
also
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government
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the government
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who
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apply
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have subsidies
their
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for their
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 fund, but
also
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the employer
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employer
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employers
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 where the learners work
needs
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need
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 to place roughly 35%.
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in
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 addition, the individual
hopely
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hopes
they
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apply
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pay only 40% for
study
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 burdens. In conclusion, from survey of adult
education
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show
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shows
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 the reason
person take
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people
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study
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because
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is because
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 they
are interest
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are interested
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 in
subject
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the subject
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 and to gain qualification. And the total
of
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apply
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money they
willing
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are willing
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 to spend
around
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is around
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 40
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percent
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per cent
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 from
theirself
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themselves
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, study, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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