The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart

shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people

think the costs of adult education should be shared.

Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
The pictures depict the results of a survey of
education
in adult ages. The first bar chart illustrates the reasons why people decide to
study
in mature age. The pie chart
preveils
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reveals
prevails
how
the
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apply
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societies
assumes
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assume
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the fee of
growth
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growing
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up
education
have
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has
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to have
proportion
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a proportion
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between
tax payer
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taxpayer
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, employer and individual. first and foremost, Over 35
percent
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per cent
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of survey
corespondens
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respondents
agrees
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agree
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proffesionals
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professionals
professional
takes
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take
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adults
education
because they
are interest
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are interested
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in
subject
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the subject
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and
also
to gain qualifications.
On the other hand
, reasons to improve
prospect
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the prospect
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of promotion,
helpful
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be helpful
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for current job and enjoy learning get 20
percent
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per cent
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of
population
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the population
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. Meanwhile, the bottom two
reason
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reasons
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that does not reach up to 15
percent
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per cent
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are
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is
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they hope to able to change jobs and to meet
person
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people
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while
they take
education
.
Secondly
, the tuition fee should
be divide
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be divided
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and the student
do
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does
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not pay 100
percent
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per cent
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. People's opinion government has
certain
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a certain
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amount from
taxpayer
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taxpayers
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to
alocate
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allocate
locate
money for their
study
cost
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costs
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,
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the
an
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ideal
of
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apply
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this
percentage
around
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is around
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25%. Not
also
government
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the government
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who
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apply
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have subsidies
their
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for their
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fund, but
also
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the employer
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employer
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employers
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where the learners work
needs
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need
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to place roughly 35%.
in
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addition, the individual
hopely
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hopes
they
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pay only 40% for
study
burdens. In conclusion, from survey of adult
education
show
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shows
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the reason
person take
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people
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study
because
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is because
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they
are interest
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are interested
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in
subject
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the subject
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and to gain qualification. And the total
of
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apply
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money they
willing
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are willing
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to spend
around
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is around
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40
percent
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per cent
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from
theirself
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themselves
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words education, study, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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