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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The charts illustrate the airport's present appearance and reconstruction changes which are expected to happen next year.
Overall
, on the second map, it can be seen the huge extension of the Gate terminal building on the northern part of the airport with the increased number of gates. Other areas will stay stable but the amount of amenities will be risen. At the present day, the airport has a single entrance and exit in the building on the South side. The hall of departures contains only a check-in zone and a cafe in front of a passport control line. The departure terminal occupies compact territory with the walkway hall and onboarding gates with the number 8. In the near future, right after redevelopment, the departure terminal on the North side will have a major evolution with the new Sky train line, an additional 10 onboarding decks and an enlarged size in general. The main space is not going to be changed in terms of building shape,
however
 a car hire place will appear at the Southeast corner of the construction. Despite that, some amenities
such
 as a bag drop cluster and ATM will be installed.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction clearly sets out what the maps show, including the time frames, and your conclusion provides a clear summary of the main changes and developments. Your essay omitted a clear conclusion summarising the main developments.
logical structure
To increase the logical structure of your essay, aim to create a more cohesive progression between ideas. Use a range of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs effectively.
supported main points
To support your main points, include more detailed comparisons and contrasts between the current state of the airport and the projected future state. Use specific details to enhance clarity.
complete response
While you provided a response to the task, there was room for more detailed and comprehensive descriptions. Introduce more depth by elaborating on the specifics of the redevelopment.
clear comprehensive ideas
The ideas are clear, but to achieve higher clarity and comprehensiveness, integrate a wider variety of sentence structures and expand on the explanations provided for each change.
relevant specific examples
Including specific examples and data where possible strengthens the relevancy and specificity of your response. Describe the features with more precision to enhance the response.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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