The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2001.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2001.
The given chart illustrates the percentage of purchased and rented
accommodation
in 2 countries between 1918 and 2001. It is interesting to note the percentage of purchased
accommodation
increased gradually over a given period of time.
Whereas
, the popularity of rented housing decreased considerably over those years. At first
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it's clear that rented housing had its highest peak in 1981, which was almost 80%, respectively.
In contrast
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purchased
accommodation
had its lowest point, nearly at 25%.
According to
the data demonstrated
household
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households
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in purchased
accommodation
had positive results, especially between 1991 and 2001, reaching its highest point
just
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under 80%.
In contrast
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purchased housing, had shown the lowest proportions (just over 30%) during those years.
To sum up
, the popularity of the two sections had fluctuated over the course of time , not including the results in 1971 when they experienced a period of equality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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