The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented line graph compares the population who visited a specific island in
Caribbean
in terms of their Correct article usage
the Caribbean
resident
place during the years 2010 to 2017.
Replace the word
residence
Overall
, ir
is clear that regardless Correct your spelling
it
the
place of stay, the Change preposition
of the
number
of people who traveled
to Change the spelling
travelled
Carribean
experienced an upward trend and increased during these 7 years.
With regard to the figures which show the rate of visitors Correct article usage
the Carribean
stood
on cruise Verb problem
apply
ship
, Fix the agreement mistake
ships
although
at first about 300.000 people travel
Wrong verb form
travelled
with
Change preposition
in
this
situation, it increased to 500.000 ones
in 2011 before meeting the Correct pronoun usage
apply
number
of
2010, which was 300.000 in 2012. From 2012 onward, with a sharp rise it exceeded the Change preposition
in
number
of visitors who preferred to remain at
Change preposition
on
island
in the middle of 2016 at less Add an article
the island
an island
that
1.5 million Correct word choice
than
ones
and reached Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
high point Correct article usage
a
at
2 million visitors in 2017.
Looking at the numbers presenting Change preposition
of
number
of people who visited the island and stood there as well, it is obvious that Change the article
a number
the number
while
there were no chsnges
in the ratio during the first 2 years, it dramatically soared to the peak point Correct your spelling
changes
at
1.5 Change preposition
of
millions
Change to singular
million
ones
in 2013. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Finally
with a decrease to less that
1.5 Correct word choice
than
millions
, it again reached the highest point at 1.5 Change to singular
million
ones
in 2017.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, ones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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