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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graph compares the population who visited a specific island in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 in terms of their
resident
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residence
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 place during the years 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
ir
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it
 is clear that regardless
the
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of the
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 place of stay, the
number
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 of people who
traveled
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travelled
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 to
Carribean
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the Carribean
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 experienced an upward trend and increased during these 7 years. With regard to the figures which show the rate of visitors
stood
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apply
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on cruise
ship
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ships
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,
although
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 at first about 300.000 people
travel
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travelled
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with
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in
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this
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 situation, it increased to 500.000
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ones
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apply
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in 2011 before meeting the
number
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of
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in
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 2010, which was 300.000 in 2012. From 2012 onward, with a sharp rise it exceeded the
number
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 of visitors who preferred to remain
at
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on
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island
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the island
an island
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 in the middle of 2016 at less
that
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than
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 1.5 million
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ones
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apply
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and reached
the
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a
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 high point
at
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of
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 2 million visitors in 2017. Looking at the numbers presenting
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number
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a number
the number
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 of people who visited the island and stood there as well, it is obvious that
while
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 there were no
chsnges
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changes
 in the ratio during the first 2 years, it dramatically soared to the peak point
at
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of
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 1.5
millions
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million
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ones
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apply
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in 2013.
Finally
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 with a decrease to less
that
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than
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 1.5
millions
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million
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, it again reached the highest point at 1.5
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ones
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apply
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in 2017.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, ones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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