The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs indicate the modifications of
road
access to a local hospital during a 3-year interval.
Overall
, it is explicit that the main difference is that the
hospital
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hospital's
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sorroundings
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surroundings
has
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have
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been expanded with the aim
creating
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of creating
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more space for both staff and people. Focusing on the initial phase, what stands out from the
sheme
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scheme
is that it was designed too basically. In more detail, it was accommodated with six bus stops
along side
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the hospital
road
; more than
this
, a public car park was located on the eastern side of
this
road
.
Also
, the hospital was
sorrounded
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surrounded
only by a ring
road
which was directly connected to the city
road
. After alternations, it can be seen that several actions have
took
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taken
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place
with
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apply
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in order to develop facilities.
Firstly
, employees’ parking has
been became
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bigger by taking up room from the bus stops;
also
, a new place, on the eastern corner of the hospital, is dedicated to people’s cars.
Furthermore
, a new bus station is constructed on the left hand of the hospital
road
between two new
roundabout
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roundabouts
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, which are built at both ends of
this
street. All the left parts stayed
at
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in
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the same format as it was in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • infrastructure
  • modifications
  • traffic flow
  • arterial road
  • roundabout
  • one-way system
  • pedestrian paths
  • public transportation
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • bypass
  • congestion
  • diverted traffic
  • upgraded facilities
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