The graph shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050.

The graph shows China's population by age group starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2050.
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The graph gives information about every age group of the population in China since 1960 including a forecast until 2050.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there was a steady decrease in the population aged between 0 to 64
years
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whereas
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the number of people
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are
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apply
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over 65
years
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gradually
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old gradually
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increased
at the end
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of the period. The elderly people over 65
years
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and between 15 to 64 have a similar pattern from 1960 to 2000. Individuals aged between 15 to 64
years
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stood at approximately over 35%.
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it was followed by a significant increase until 2020 and reached a high of 70%.
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, the number is estimated to fall gradually until the end of the period. Meanwhile, elderly people over 65
years
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began under 17,5%. There was a steady rise between 1960 to 1990. After that, it continued with a moderate fall in the following two
years
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and peaked at the lowest percentage in 2010.
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,
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population will significantly grow and hit a high of over 17,5% in 2020.
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, children under 14
years
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started at over 35% at the beginning of the timeframe which continued with a moderate decline between 1960 to 2000.
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this
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, the percentage is predicted to drop gradually and attain a through of 17,5% in 2050
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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