It has been observed that in many countries notenoughstudentsarechoosingto studyscience subjects at university. What do you think are the causes of the problem? What are the effects on society

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Financial illiteracy used to be the biggest problem of my childhood. Though, my mother had an average salary and some bonuses from my father as child support. Even though, my mom did not have enough financial knowledge to manage money effectively. I really did not have an idea what

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my young and silly mind. As a big brother to my sister and an assistant to my mother, I had to find a way to abandon

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paycheck-to-paycheck lifestyle.

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of 10th grade, I explored a new sphere with outrageous potential,

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field is about speculating digital pictures that have value in

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community. At the beginning of my way, I started taking courses , and

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day by day I made NFT a part of my daily routine and

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, I started earning my livelihood.

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, after 1 year,

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working I spotted that very talented

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who are constantly making high-quality NFTs went unnoticed by the community. At

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point, I realized that I wanted to help them and started planning my own ecosystem, where

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could buy a place at my project and

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I could send out their creations to every volunteer for free, for just entering 1 use code that can be obtained from other accounts every 2

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, every month,

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, these NFTs can be sold in platforms

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as magiceden.io, tensor.trade, coral.cube. So, everyone has their own profit, people can receive NFTs from

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sell them to get money, as a head of

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project I may receive money from

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. Now, it is my dream to materialize

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, to do it, I must study finances at an academic degree because

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idea directly demands working with budget, controlling finances may avoid some big budget spaces in the lifecycle of

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The essay provided does not adhere to the topic given, which concerns the causes and effects of students not choosing to study science subjects at university. Ensure that the content of your essay directly addresses the task provided.

coherence and cohesion

The essay lacks a clear introduction, coherent structure, and conclusion that relate to the essay topic. To improve coherence and cohesion, establish a clear logical sequence of ideas, and always include an introduction that presents the topic, followed by body paragraphs that elaborate the points made, and a conclusion that summarizes the main ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

313 words

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It has been observed that in many countries notenoughstudentsarechoosingto studyscience subjects at university. What do you think are the causes of the problem? What are the effects on society

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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is important for people Why might this be the case Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

many people aim to achieve a balance between work and other parts of lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of the problem? how to overcome it?