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In many countries import food from other contry of the world.what are the advantages and disadvantages of this kasur.

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In the contemporary era, importing and exporting are very busy
due to
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 modern technology and many
countries
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 use
this
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 trend to import
food
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 like rice, wheat and many other items from different
countries
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 for their public. In
this
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 essay, I will try to explain the merits and pitfalls of
this
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 kasur. The preponderant merits are,
many
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that many
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countries
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 do not have an adequate amount of land or infertile land and do not have appropriate weather to grow a variety of
food
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 products and they import them from a different nation to fulfil the needs of the people .
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, The UAE does not
appropriate
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have appropriate
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 weather conditions for growing wheat and they are importing wheat from India
at
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 large amounts to complete the necessities of the nation.
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, importing helps many kingdoms to
complete
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meet
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 the demand and necessities of their individuals.
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Whereas
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However
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, the trends have negative consequences on the public of the exporting
countries
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 as the government or the business owner of the exporting
countries
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 export their variety of good
food
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 to other
countries
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 and the public of the nation has leftover
food
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 which sells at a high price which makes many troubles to the individuals.
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, In India, most of the public does not appropriate
food
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 or
food
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 at high prices because the government exports
food
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 at high prices which is the main reason for poverty in India.
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, exporting or importing
food
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 products by many
countries
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 can have a very negative effect on the public of the production country. In conclusion, importing is
good
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a good
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 way for
countries
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 who do not have enough
food
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 for the public so they need to import
food
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 from other states but it has many drawbacks to exporting
countries
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.
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