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The chart below show waste collection by recycling center from 2011 to 2015.

The chart below show waste collection by recycling center from 2011 to 2015.
The bar chart compared the figures for
waste
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 collections in four categories at a recycling
center
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centre
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 between 2011 and 2015.
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, it is noticeable that
waste
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 collections for all areas increased,
in particular
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 for
the
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paper
waste
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 which was generally highest
throught out
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throughout
 the period.
In contrast
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, garden and tin
waste
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 were less commonly recycled. There was a consistent decrease
for
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 the amount of paper
waste
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 from 57
tons
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 to 40
tons
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by
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from
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 2011 to 2013,
however
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, the data
increasing
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increased
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 dramatically
to
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for
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 the rest of the period
reached
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and reached
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 a top
to
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of
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 70
tons
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at
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in
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 2015.
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, in 2011, the
figures
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figure
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 for glass
waste
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 was 48
tons
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then
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 it slightly decreased to 41
tons
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 by the year 2012. The figure
then
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 recovered to
it
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its
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 initial number, overtaking the statistic for paper in 2013, and fluctuated around 50
tons
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 for the rest of the time surveys. The number of tins
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waste
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of waste
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 was erratic around 35
tons
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 for the 5-year-period and reached 39
tons
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 in 2015. Meanwhile, the garden
waste
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 was lowest at 32
tons
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 in 2011,
and
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dropping to 15
tons
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 in 2012, before rebounding to 31
tons
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 the next year and finishing at 35
tons
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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