The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the number of
visitor's
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visitors
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tourists
in
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on
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a Caribbean island
during
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from
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2010 to 2017.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the total percentage of visitor's tourists from 2010 to 2017 was slightly increasing from 1
millions
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million
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to 3.5
millions
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.
According to
what was shown, the average of visitors who
are
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staying on
island
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the island
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was
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rapidly growing up during 2011 to 2012 from 0.7
millions
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to 1.4
millions
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million
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.
On the other hand
, the average of visitors who are staying on cruise
ship
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was
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slightly
falling down
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from 0.5 million to 0.3 million. After that , the rate in both were s
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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