Robotics is necessary for future human development. But it has both advantages and disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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robotics

is essential for our growth in the future, and its advantages

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outweigh

than disadvantages.

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will discuss both pros and cons in detail, and will be provided my personal view. On the one hand, Looking towards the

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not only beneficial but

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technology-focused world

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no longer practical and we have

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about using some new tools like

robotics

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. It brings

people

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them about

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of information that we cannot even imagine them.

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want to learn

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language,

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do not need

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because

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robots

exist and

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would teach me in the best way. And it would help us to discover some

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that might be useful for human

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them, and it could put their tremendous opportunity in danger,

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many jobs will be replaced by

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robots

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and they prefer to choose the easy way. So it is plausible that

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eradicate their

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in the near future. In conclusion, if

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able to use

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, we will witness

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us.

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Your introduction requires a clearer thesis statement that outlines your view. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence. Try to use more cohesive devices to better link your ideas.

task achievement

Make sure to address all parts of the task equally. This includes discussing both views comprehensively and providing a clear opinion. Avoid repetition and ensure that each paragraph expands on a new idea.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
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to illustrate this
to give a clear example
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3Word repetition
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47Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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4.00

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Relevant & specific examples

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Robotics is necessary for future human development. But it has both advantages and disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

Write about the following topic: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, distance-learning have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person.To what extent do you agree or disagree

The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.