Robotics is necessary for future human development. But it has both advantages and disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

robotics
is essential for our growth in the future, and its advantages
outweight
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outweigh
than disadvantages.
This
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essay
assay
will discuss both pros and cons in detail, and will be provided my personal view. On the one hand, Looking towards the
posetive
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positive
aspects, it can be
cairtainly
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certainly
said that
robotics
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robotics is
robotics was
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not only beneficial but
also
necessary. In
this
technology-focused world
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old-fashioned
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style
in
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is
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no longer practical and we have
be thought
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been thinking
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about using some new tools like
robotics
with
latest
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the latest
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breakthrows
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breakthroughs
. It brings
people
aware and
inform
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informs
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them about
wide
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a wide
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rang
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range
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of information that we cannot even imagine them.
For example
, when
i
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I
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want to learn
new
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a new
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language,
i
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I
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do not need
mentor
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a mentor
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because
robats
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robots
exist and
it
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they
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would teach me in the best way. And it would help us to discover some
importatnt
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important
thing
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things
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that might be useful for human
being
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beings
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.
On the other hand
, some
people
are against the
avobe-mentioned
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aforementioned
view. they are of the opinion that
,
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apply
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it
warn
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warns
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them, and it could put their tremendous opportunity in danger,
due to
they might lose the boat or lose their job. In the near future
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,
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many jobs will be replaced by
robats
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robots
. For
instans
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instance
, it could be predicted that, if we have sufficient
robats
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robots
,
this
world does not require some expert
peple
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people
to make
their
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a
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huge effort
for doing
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to do
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their best,
instead
they use
robats
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robots
for doing
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to do
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all the
job
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jobs
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immidietely
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immediately
.
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Furthermore
,
people
would not have income anymore.
People
would not rely on other's potential talents and
skill
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skills
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and they prefer to choose the easy way. So it is plausible that
people
assume, it
causes
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will
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eradicate their
life
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lives
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in the near future. In conclusion, if
we
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we are
we were
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able to use
robotics
truely
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truly
, we will witness
country
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the country
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florishing
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flourishing
. We are not allowed to use them in any field, and
government
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the government
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should limit
for
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them for
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us.
In addition
,
policy makers
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policymakers
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ought to be aware and inform
people
.
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction requires a clearer thesis statement that outlines your view. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence. Try to use more cohesive devices to better link your ideas.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task equally. This includes discussing both views comprehensively and providing a clear opinion. Avoid repetition and ensure that each paragraph expands on a new idea.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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