An increasing number of people are changing careers during their working life. What do you think are the reasons of this? Is it a positive or a negative development for society?
Workers
nowadays prefer to shift their career
during their working lives, not only that, some of them even change their Fix the agreement mistake
careers
job
more than one
time. This
case results from some reasons that will be elaborated in this
essay, let alone the personal perspective of this
situation leads to positive development for society.
It is undeniable that people
will effort harder to achieve prosperous lives, and changing their personal career
is Fix the agreement mistake
careers
one
of the ways. To gain prosperity, workers
who have many abilities contemplated
Wrong verb form
contemplate
themselves
Correct pronoun usage
apply
to discover
Change the verb form
discovering
comfort
jobs for them, it is natural since they will consider the benefits first. If the Replace the word
comfortable
workers
get lower salaries, they will reconsider to find
another Change the verb form
finding
job
in which the company can guarantee their salary higher. In addition
, an
environment of the Correct article usage
the
job
plays an essential role as well. People
who work
in a very tight and serious atmosphere will result in stress and feel under pressured
. Change the form of the verb
pressure
One
of the evidences
taken nowadays is in Indonesia, especially in Morowali where many young Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
workers
decide to work
there, yet it just
for Add a missing verb
is just
one
to two years before deciding to move because the companies provide a very strict schedule and force them to work
harder every day. As a result
, they will end the contracts right after the end of their period and search for other jobs.
In terms of the benefits of shifting the
Correct article usage
apply
job
, it is obvious that some advantages will Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
be
intuitively Verb problem
apply
risen
from Verb problem
arise
this
condition; prosperity and good mental health will be two of them. First,
it is correlated with the aforementioned reasons in which people
who decide to change their career
will get higher salary
in their next jobs and bring impact to the society, Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
not to mention
they will try harder to widen their skills. Moreover
, employees who left their former job
because of getting pressuredFix the agreement mistake
jobs
,
can heal their mental in an environment Remove the comma
apply
that
they are comfortable Correct word choice
where
to
Change the verb form
working
work
. For instance
, the ones left
their Correct pronoun usage
who left
job
in Morowali will work
in another company or create their own fields since they have had skills.
To conclude
, in my personal perspective, it is acceptable for people
to change their career
to find Fix the agreement mistake
careers
better
life. As long as they have skills and chances, it will be better for them and for Add an article
a better
society
development.Change noun form
society's
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