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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvatages?

Nowadays with the development and evolution of technology, driverless
vehicles
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 especially
cars
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 are no longer a dream or the product of imagination. Still, people are not taking them seriously
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 the fear of uncontrolled risks
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 as accidents
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system breakdown or other general safety concerns. Yet, I hold an optimistic belief that these potential cons are solvable,
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, resisting the advantages these
vehicles
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 can bring to our lives like extreme
convinience
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convenience
 and advanced
tachnology
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technology
 is a fool step back.
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were
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 pretty early in
2000s
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 and the developers of
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 technology have
contantly
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constantly
improving
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 them.
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,
no
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 many countries' governments
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 agreed to bring them to life and grant them actual licences to be
availale
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available
 on the market
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 the
responsbility
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responsibility
 they might have to take if these
vehicles
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will
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 not
be functioning
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 accurately, or even
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, causing deaths to someone.
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. 
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, the advantages of these future
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 seem to be more of appreciation than of
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. With regards to people
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who
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 do not genetically inherit the ability to become good drivers nor can improve it through
practices
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,
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cars
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 are just a game
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 to them. We may not know they exist but they they do and are
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struggling
everyday
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 as they have to rely on others to travel from one place to another. The elderly
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 a part of
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 minority.
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, features including self parking
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 an upside as well. China, one of the first countries
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recognising
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 and
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permitting
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this
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 trend to develop, has received positive feedback from the users as one of their big concerns, which is the inability to park their
cars
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 themselves skillfully, especially in cramped parking lots has been resolved.  In conclusion, it is understandable that
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new technology always
face
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 objection and rejection in the first place as human beings have a
tendancy
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tendency
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 change resistance.
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, with many pros these driverless
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 can contribute to our lives, it is surely that people have to gradually adapt, the same as the way they adapted to the internet or smart devices.

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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is lacking coherence in some areas, where ideas are not clearly connected or logically sequenced. It is important to use a range of cohesive devices and paragraphing which clearly separate ideas in order to guide the reader through the argument in a logical way.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present but lack clarity in stating the main topic and summarizing the main points of the argument. An effective essay should have a clear introduction that sets out the topic and the writer's position, followed by body paragraphs that elaborate on the supporting arguments, and a conclusion that succinctly wraps up the discussion by restating the position and summarizing the main points.
coherence cohesion
You need to ensure that each main point is elaborated with sufficient support. Whether it's evidence, examples, or explanation, this supporting information should clearly relate to the main idea of each paragraph, which in turn reflects the overall position stated in the introduction.
task achievement
The response is incomplete as it does not fully address the question. Be sure to respond to all parts of the prompt, weigh the advantages against the disadvantages, and present a clear position on whether one outweighs the other.
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Develop your ideas more comprehensively by elaborating on how driverless vehicles will benefit or impact society. Use clear and elaborated explanations to demonstrate your understanding of the topic.
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Using specific, real-life examples strengthens your argument. You mention China's experience with driverless cars, but more detailed examples of the advantages or disadvantages in practice would give more weight to your points.
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