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People are using a lot of online language translation apps. Do the bene fits of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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People
 are using a lot of online language
translation
apps
. Do the
bene fits
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benefits
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 of
this
 outweigh the disadvantages? It is argued that the usage of online linguistic
translation
 tools is becoming more common among individuals. I strongly believe that it has more advantages rather than
drawback
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drawbacks
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 since it helps to facilitate the work of translators and
movement
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the movement
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 of
people
 around the world. First of all, traditionally those
people
 who have been working as
translator
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translators
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 always need a good dictionary and other tools to finish the given task as
quick
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quickly
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 as possible. But a good dictionary is not always enough to finish the job in a short time
of
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period
that is
 why the usage of modern online tools like
translation
apps
 has a crucial role in
this
 field.
Secondly
, nowadays many
people
 are going to different countries of the world as
tourist
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 even to those countries where they can hardly find an interpreter. In
such
cases
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cases,
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 the utilization of online
translation
apps
 will be vitally useful.
For example
, when a friend of mine was in South Korea to attend a professional development course, where he lived in a university dormitory, during the night the fire alarm system of
building
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 was automatically on and he could not explain
the
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to the
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 security man of the campus the situation as
this
 man did not speak English. My friend texted what he intended to tell him in
google
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translator
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 and showed the
translation
 to the security. In conclusion, utilization of online
translation
apps
 has more benefits than disadvantages
this
 is due
the
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 fact that it helps the translators to finish their jobs quickly and it
also
 is equally important for tourists to communicate with local
people
.
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