Write about the following topic: Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effect will this have on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is an unfortunate truth that many
criminals
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persist in a life of
crime
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after being in jail.
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is largely
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an unwillingness of
society
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to accept ex-convicts, which harms the economy and causes an increase in
crime
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victims
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. Owing to a lack of job opportunities once out of prison, most former prisoners feel insecure
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their future. Many finish with a prison record which puts off recruitment managers at major corporations who often feel ex-offenders are untrustworthy.
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, in the United States, almost
three quarters
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of all ex-inmates turn to
crime
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within five years of leaving prison.
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,
society
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is frequently reluctant to welcome back ex-prisoners. Former
criminals
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report difficulty finding apartments to rent or even applying for financial aid to fund their education.
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causes many to feel that a criminal life is their only option. Reoffending hurts both the economy and those
victims
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of
crime
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. When former
criminals
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reoffend
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re-offend
, more tax dollars must be spent on re-incarceration, legal fees and maintaining prisoners in jail. As re-offenses continue, budgets for other government programs
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as education or social services must be cut to make up for increased expenses. Reoffending
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results in more
crime
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victims
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, many of whom face a lifetime of torment from the trauma created by
crime
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. The more
victims
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there are, the more pressure that citizens put on governments to maintain a safe
society
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which causes more police and overcrowding in prisons which studies show only makes the issue worse. In conclusion, an uncertain future and hostile
society
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results
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in more
crime
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, more
victims
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and more expense to the
tax payer
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taxpayer
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. Only through changing attitudes will
criminals
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ever be given the chance to have a future and avoid turning back to
crime
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.
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