The map below shows the village of Stokefort in 1930 and 2010.
The two maps indicate the comparison between Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Throughout the 170 years, there are some significant changes have been made in the location.
The thing that pops up the most is the green area that has been changed into citizen houses. The farm that used to be a place for the cows
is now become
Change to the active voice
now becomes
has now become
solid
Correct article usage
a solid
buildings
from the corner of the bridge until the end of the Fix the agreement mistake
building
road
for human
to live in. Fix the agreement mistake
humans
Moreover
, on the east of Stokeford in 1930 used to have Add an article
a garden
garden
in Fix the agreement mistake
gardens
contradictory
with Replace the word
contradiction
retirement
Correct article usage
the retirement
home
for old people in 2010.
Some developments Fix the agreement mistake
homes
is
Change the verb form
are
also
easy to notice. For instance
, the old primary school used to be smaller to compare
with the 2010 primary school which has larger and more sturdy Change the verb form
compared
building
. More than that, the post office that used to stand next to shops now is in the middle of houses.
The Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
road
route in 1930 was also
more simple than it's
in 2010. The Wrong verb form
it was
road
only had one long and a bit curvy line until it approached the river. On the other hand
, the road
in 2010 has an intersection and turns to connect to the
each Remove the article
apply
blocks
.Change to a singular noun
block
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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