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The graph below shows the percentage of urban\suburban and rural households in a European country that had Internet access between 1999 and 2014.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban\suburban and rural households in a European country that had Internet access between 1999 and 2014.
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accessibility
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the accessibility
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 of
Internet
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the Internet
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had had
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apply
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in
two
 different types of households in a European country from 1999 to 2004. It can be noticed that access to the
Internet
 in
two
areas
had
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has
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 experienced a gradual increase over 6 years. In 1999,
urban\suburban
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urban/suburban
 households`
Internet
 access stood at almost 15%,
whereas
 rural households` was nearly 2%. The following year (2000),
Internet
 accessibility in
two
 parts of the country had grown rapidly for urban\suburban
areas
 by 15% (from 15% to 30%) and for rural
areas
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by
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 about 14%.
Furthermore
, it is interesting that
proportion
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the proportion
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 of
two
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the two
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areas
 had increased each year
on
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in
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 a row by almost 10% - 15 %, in 2000, 2001 and 2002.
According to
 the demonstrated data the
last
two
 years (2003 and 2004)
two
 trends continued levelling up (urban\suburban
areas
 about 52% - 55%) (
rural
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and rural
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areas
 from 25% to 35%), respectively.
Overall
,
two
section
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sections
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 undergo positive growth throughout the time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, two, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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