The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
The table illustrates how much time UK unemployed spend
their
free time in 14 different categories. Change preposition
on their
Overall
, it is clear, that housework by women
in the morning is far
the Change preposition
by far
most
highest amount in total.
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To begin
with, in the morning men
are
usually spend their time Unnecessary verb
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with
shopping and job hunting, Change preposition
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while
ladies doing
the daily chores. Wrong verb form
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Furthermore
, in afternoon
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the afternoon
men
are likely to do gardening and watching
TV, in comparison with Wrong verb form
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women
who are
mostly Verb problem
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reading
and Wrong verb form
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also watching
something Wrong verb form
watch
in
the TV.
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on
Moreover
, in the early hours only 2 per cent of men
drinking
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drink
similarly
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similar
with
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to
women
since their numbers in the same categorie
is only 1%. Correct your spelling
category
However
, in afternoon
1% of Correct article usage
the afternoon
men
staying
in Wrong verb form
stay
the
bed, similar to Correct article usage
apply
women
due to
their amount is
zero. Wrong verb form
being
Finally
, it is noticable
that Correct your spelling
noticeable
notable
women
's highest percentages are in the housework ascpect
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aspect
also
in the morning and in afternoon
as well. Add an article
the afternoon
an afternoon
On the other hand
men
's highest score is in the
job hunting and in the TV streaming categories.Correct article usage
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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