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Some say that electronics books will make traditional books disappear in the future. DO you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era, some people believe that
Ebooks
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 will be an appropriate alternative
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paper
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 ones in the future. Despite all due respect to
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 theory and the benefits of online books, I don'
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 agree with
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 statement.
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 with, some groups of society don'
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 see
Ebooks
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 as the future of reading. Most professional readers can'
t
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 communicate with a book
untill
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until
 they feel the actual
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 and smell it. Because they should connect to the book and the mind of the writer to have a broader view
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 what is happening in the story. So, it can
sctivate
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activate
 some
homones
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hormones
 in the brain and increase the feeling of happiness in the reader.
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,
paper
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 isn'
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 even injurious to health compared to electronic devices.
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 the temporary effects of blue light on displays on
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the mind
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 and eyes, they can lead to permanent disabilities like impairing vision and even blindness.
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, their invisible signals
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can
 interfere with sleep. Despite all the drawbacks of
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, their advocates tout
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their
the
 advantages. Some communities live in remote
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regions
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 and don'
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access
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 to many books. Plus, some translation copies aren'
t
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 available
averywhere
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anywhere
.
nevertheless
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, technology and
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the inthernet
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inthernet
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Internet
 can bring equality to some places which is
assiciated
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associated
 with the growth of mind and spirit.
Environmet
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Environment
 can feel the effects of
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 as well.
in
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 the Amazon forests,
for instance
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, about 2000 huge trees are being cut down annually and
this
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 number is rising in other forests. 60
percent
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per cent
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 of these
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timbres
timbers
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are
 used for producing
paper
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 for
the
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apply
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books which is
a
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 enormous
quantitiy
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quantity
quantities
 and the ink and
chemichal
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chemical
 substances used to write on these papers have dangerous consequences.
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, the renown of online
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written
writers
 is spreading among people. but
i
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 think they won'
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 replace the
traditionals
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traditional
 ones forever.
However
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, they can be used beside
paper
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 ones to enhance the efficiency of the book.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a logical structure by presenting ideas clearly and coherently. Use clear paragraphing with clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to establish the main idea.
coherence cohesion
Create more cohesion by using a greater range of linking words and phrases to better connect ideas within and across paragraphs.
task achievement
Write a clear introduction that directly responds to the task by stating your opinion or position. Ensure a clear thesis statement is present.
task achievement
Develop ideas fully, expanding on key points with detailed explanations and relevant examples that clearly support your position and enhance the argument.
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Include specific and relevant examples to support your arguments. Avoid general statements and ensure examples are directly tied to the points being made.
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