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Nowadays, it is more important to plant trees in open spaces in town and cities than building houses. Do u agree or disagree ?

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contemporary
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 era, it is irrefutable that we
are
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currently live in a world where
people
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 have awareness regarding to environment.
it
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 is argued
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some that nowadays
people
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 are likely to plant
trees
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 and flowers in open areas
instead
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 of new constructions. I firmly believe that
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these days
create
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creating
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 green spaces in towns and cities will
definetely
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definitely
effect
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affect
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people
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's
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life
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 and behaviours. On the one hand,
cities
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cities'
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 urban planning changes rapidly. governments create more green places
anymore
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for example
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, recently
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passed
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 by parliament called "green
city
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" in Turkey and there is no longer permission for new buildings in
city
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centers
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. they are planning to make cities more spacious and reduce
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air pollution.
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, they are thinking
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 factories out of the
city
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. In
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addition
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 they
have
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aim
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 to reduce air pollution and make
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city
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the city
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more green
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.
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, flowers,
such
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 as
trees
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 could help to reduce harmful
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bacteria
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life
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 longer.
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,
people
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 in
switzerland
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lives
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 longer than
people
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 in India
due to
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 green space.
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, it can
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effects
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the human's
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human's
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 mind.
according to
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 researchers, swiss
people
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 are the
less
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 stressful
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 in the world and some argue that it is because
having
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 open space surrounded by
trees
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.
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, plants not only
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affects
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 individual's
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,
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, but
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it
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also
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 directly impact
on
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their personalities. In conclusion,
under
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the
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lights
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 of these
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arguments
arguements
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 we can clearly say that,
in
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these days planting
trees
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more
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is more
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 pivotal than building houses. it has
impact
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an impact
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 on
person's
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a person's
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life
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 and
behavious
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behaviour
behaviours
.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay shows an adequate logical structure, but could benefit from improved paragraphing and better organization of ideas. To enhance the logical flow, use transitional phrases and ensure each paragraph centers around a single main idea.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present; however, they need to be more explicit in restating the prompt and summarizing the main points, respectively. The conclusion particularly should reinforce your stance without introducing new ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion
You included main points that are relevant to the topic; however, these need to be further developed. Expand your paragraphs by providing more detailed explanations and introduce real-life examples or case studies to substantiate your arguments.
Task Achievement
You have completed the task by expressing your opinion on the importance of planting trees versus building houses. However, your response lacks depth. To improve, ensure you fully address the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument, even if you have a strong opinion one way. Additionally, articulating your ideas with a variety of complex structures and vocabulary will enhance the quality of your essay.
Task Achievement
Your ideas are relevant but need more clarity and expansion. Use a range of sentence structures and aim for precision in your language to make your arguments more compelling and comprehensive.
Task Achievement
The examples given are general and could be more specific and directly related to the topic. Concrete examples, statistics, or authoritative quotes can provide a stronger foundation for your arguments. Avoid hypotheticals and strive for tangible, real-world evidence.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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