Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it? what do you think are the main causes of this problem abd what measures could be taken to solve it ?
In the contemporary era, it is irrefutable that
remarkable
amount of Correct article usage
a remarkable
people
lives
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live
in
Change preposition
on
streets
. there are a lot of reasons Correct article usage
the streets
of
Change preposition
for
increased
number of homeless Add an article
the increased
an increased
people
such
as,
rent prices and family issues. I firmly believe that Remove the comma
apply
government
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the government
shoul
be taken Correct your spelling
should
precuation
to solve Correct your spelling
precaution
precautions
this
issue.
On the one hand, especially in big cities such
as Los Angeles and New York, number
of homeless Change the article
the number
people
has been
increased in 10 years. most of them complain about increased rent prices. Every year more than 5000 Unnecessary verb
apply
people
become homeless due
to cannot afford Change preposition
because
renting
. Replace the word
rent
However
it is not the only reason for being homeless. Add a comma
However,
For instance
, families let their children to streets
when they Correct article usage
the streets
become
18 in Verb problem
turn
US
. Correct article usage
the US
According to
researchers, 2 of 10 young people
have to live in
Change preposition
on
streets
because of family problems. families think that they Correct article usage
the streets
dont
have to take care Correct your spelling
don't
their
children after they become 18 unless they are working. Change preposition
of their
Thus
, people
starting to live on streets
.
what can we do about it? Correct article usage
the streets
this
problem cannot fix
by individual effort. Governments and nations have to be a part of the solution. They can Wrong verb form
be fixed
make
encourage homeless Verb problem
apply
people
to work otherwise
they will lose their independence and will belong to streets
forever. Correct article usage
the streets
moreover
, dormitories could build
by governments and they can live there until they create new life. Wrong verb form
be built
For
example
half of Add a comma
example,
people
who Add an article
the people
lives
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live
streets
tend to create life if they have chance
.
In conclusion, Add an article
a chance
the chance
under
Change preposition
in
the
light of these arguments, we can clearly say that, whether family issues or rental prices Correct article usage
apply
people
lives
out Change the verb form
live
the
house and governments are the only Change preposition
of the
place
to solve Change the noun form
places
this
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