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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the united kingdom,sweden,italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007 . Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the united kingdom,sweden,italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007 . Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates
average
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the average
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 of carbon dioxide
effects
 per person in 4 different countries in
europe
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Europe
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 over a
40 year
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40-year
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 period between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
,what stands out from the graph is that there
were
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 a steady rise in both
portugal
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Portugal
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 and
italy
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Italy
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.
In addition
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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 had the most emissions of dioxide carbon after 4 decades even
it
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though it
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 had a little
dicrease
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decrease
. There was a considerable rise in
Sweden
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Sweden's
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effects
 in the first 10
years
 but after
that
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 it
had been decreasing
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 in the next 30
years
 as it had been equal to
Portugal
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Portugal's
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effects
 which had almost levelled off in the
last
 10
years
.
Although
 Italy had a sharp rise in the first 10
years
,it had increased gradually in the next 30
years
.All of the four
european
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European
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countries
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countries'
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co2
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CO2
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effects
 were between 5 to 9 I suppose. The emissions of carbon dioxide could be because of economic development and we have to be
cautios
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cautious
 about
the
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their
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 impacts of them.
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