You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase Write a letter to the company that you bought the company from. In you email Give details of he purchase describe the problem explain why you need a replacemnet urgently

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about a recent purchase from your online store. I ordered a navy blue, large-size fitness tracksuit. Though, I paid great attention to colour and measurement guidelines, but still did not get my desired article. I hope you will consider my condition favourably. Let me explain my problem in more detail I have been always a satisfied customer of yours, but the trouble starts with receiving the particular delivery today.
First,
its colour is plain blue contrary to the original ask which was navy blue.
Then
, it is both short and tight.
Therefore
, would you kindly make the replacement at earliest? As I am already overweight my fitness trainer prescribed me 90 minutes of exercise daily including a 10-kilometre running.
Moreover
,
further
delay in exercise may cause cardiac issues which I definitely do not want to indulge in. I look forward to receiving from you. Yours faithfully, Haris Khan
Submitted by Haris Khan on

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Task Achievement
The letter addresses most of the given tasks, but the reasons for the urgency are not clearly linked to the need for the clothing. Make sure that the letter's purpose is consistently conveyed throughout.
Coherence & Cohesion
The logical flow of the letter is somewhat disrupted by grammatical errors and unclear connections between ideas. Using clear and concise language will help improve the logical structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Paragraphing has been attempted with each issue addressed separately, but the development of each point could be improved with more detailed explanations.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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