In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside theses vehicles will be passagers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
There is no doubt that we are living in a
technology driven
world. Fully automated driverless Add a hyphen
technology-driven
passanger
vehicles will be a reality in Correct your spelling
passenger
near
future. In my view, Correct article usage
the near
this
benefit of Correct determiner usage
the
this
technology will be a revolution in the transport industry and drawbacks
are minimal which I will explain in Correct article usage
the drawbacks
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essay.
To begin
with, a fraction of people is claiming
that driverless passenger vehicle is Wrong verb form
claim
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a danger
the danger
danger
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dangerous
for
human life. The Change preposition
to
techonogy
can be Correct your spelling
technology
manupulated
by experts and cause harm to the public. Correct your spelling
manipulated
In other words
, the
technology behind these automatic Correct word choice
if the
cars
is hacked by any anti-social group will be detrimental. For example
, the terrorits
can kill any of their Correct your spelling
terrorists
terrorist
target
by controlling the electronic vehicle system. Change to a plural noun
targets
Furthermore
, this
will effect
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affect
job
safety of thousands of drivers around the globe. Correct article usage
the job
The corporate
firms can Correct article usage
Corporate
easly
control the transportation industry using Correct your spelling
easily
this
innovation. As a result
, drivers
jobs might be Change noun form
drivers'
driver's
cut-off
which may affect the financial security of the society. Correct your spelling
cut off
However
, I believe that driverless automobiles have more benefits than
On the other hand
, The
automatic Correct article usage
apply
cars
will be more convenient and accurate. These kind
of Change the determiner
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These kinds
cars
will be controlled by electronic
system which will Add an article
an electronic
be help
to Change the verb form
help
to
control the time schedule more accurately. Remove the redundancy
apply
In other words
, there will be no human delay in the
passenger vehicle management. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, the
recent survey in Correct article usage
a
UK
indicated that the biggest concern about Correct article usage
the UK
public
transportation system is the delay Correct article usage
the public
of
the service. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, the transportation cost
will significantly Fix the agreement mistake
costs
reduce
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using
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by using
the
fully automated Correct article usage
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cars
. The competition in the industry will increase and that would reduce price
and provide better service.
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prices
Although
automated vehicles will have safety issues and reduce the jobs
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are
concerns, accuracy and cost reduction should be an advantage. In my opinion, Unnecessary verb
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public convenience is Correct article usage
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paramound
.Correct your spelling
paramount
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