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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010 (Figures are in millions of dollars). Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010 (Figures are in millions of dollars). Write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the annual salary for
population
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the population
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 in developing
countries
 USA, EU
countries
 and other
countries
 between 2006 and 2010. Looking from
overall
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an overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
,
USA
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the USA
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 experienced a significant increase over
four
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a
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year
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four-year
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 period,
while
EU
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the EU
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 and other
countries
 remained relatively stable during the period. Look at the table for more detail, the amount of money given to developing
countries
 by USA witnessed a considerable increase between 2006 and 2008 years, from 9,8
millions
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million
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 to 17
millions
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million
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. In the following year, the amount of money slightly decreased to 16.7
millions
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million
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.
However
, by, 2010 the figure had risen to 20.3
millions
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million
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.
Moreover
,
deep
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a deep
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 analysis of the table provided that, the amount of money given to developing
countries
 by
EU
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the EU
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 and other
countries
 saw a steady rise until
2008
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the 2008
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 year, from 3.1 and 2.8
millions
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million
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 to 3,9 and 3.5
millions
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million
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 respectively. In 2009 both figures fell by 0,3
millions
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million
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,
whereas
 in 2010 both figures experienced a constant increase
by
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of
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 0,5
millions
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million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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