Cohabitation is believed to bring huge advantages for young people since it enables them to fully understand each other before deciding to get married. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The topic above addresses that many societies believe that
cohabitation
is a way to bridge the two people who are getting married and understand each other in terms of communication and understanding. I fully agree to
this
matter. I speak of
this
as married-life training, which does not only talk about beauty and wealth but
also
about the necessity of a calm mind and better communication with our
partner
.
First,
marriage is different from so many relationships, like boyfriend and girlfriend. Once they are married, they have a spouse to look for until the end of the day. That's why
cohabitation
is a way to express their true self to another
partner
. Knowing each other without hesitation in
real time
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is what every
partner
needs to tackle any problems ahead.
For example
, in three years of relationship, a friend of mine never knows that their
partner
is afraid of bugs. After implementing
cohabitation
, she
finally
knew it and could communicate how to handle it in the future.
Second,
to be married means choosing the best of the best partners in the world. Shall we avoid the worst even if miscommunications have already occurred
.
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Cohabitation
, once again, is
such
a way to implement better communication in routines. Any doubts before marriage can be said when the event begins to fix the will of the sacral (marriage). Many people,
for instance
, are easily getting divorced because of miscommunication, they don't fully understand their partners and easily decide to get married. So, in a nutshell,
cohabitation
needs to be implemented by each
partner
who will get married to fully understand how
to begin
a life and continuously live with
partner
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forever and avoid the worst events.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compatibility
  • habits
  • preferences
  • conflict-resolution
  • deal-breakers
  • financial responsibilities
  • domestic tasks
  • realistic view
  • emotional trust
  • deepening the bond
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