Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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unpleased occupation or shortage of income. Add the comma(s)
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situation. In my opinion, even if it’s hard to change we should at least try to make it better.
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have suffered
on
their jobs. For these Change preposition
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, it is not a bad idea not Correct your spelling
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trying
to change the job or Change the verb form
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working
overtime to increase the salary. They may end up Wrong verb form
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by
feeling more stress on a person. Change preposition
apply
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recent studies, employees were more mentally healthy when they were not trying to race to each other when compared Correct article usage
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now
and twenty years ago.
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, most believed that bad circumstances shouldn’t be acceptable, Linking Words
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conditions
every person started to demand better and better. It is understandable because taking Add a comma
conditions,
risk
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better paid
job. So, Add a hyphen
better-paid
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feature of them is not giving up and not accepting their fate.
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noticeable
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takes
standarts
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Your attempt to answer the task is somewhat adequate. It is important that your argument directly addresses the task and that you discuss both views mentioned in the prompt comprehensively before giving your own opinion. Aim for a more balanced treatment of the views and clearly signal your opinion in the conclusion.
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