A lot of peoplehave become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives.Do you agree that living in computer age has more advantages than disadvantages. Describe the positive andnegative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

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Technology is what drives the world today; it

becomes

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has become

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the

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integral part of our day-to-day life as it would be hard to imagine our successful future without

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internet

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the internet

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, there are some people

believe

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who believe

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that it leads to our

dependencies

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dependency

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solely on

latest

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the latest

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technologies

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such

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internet

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the internet

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and smart gadgets. To counter

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, I believe that living in today's technological world has numerous merits

than

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its demerits which are articulated in

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paragraphs. Conspicuously, there are numerous ways

technologies

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have impacted us positively.

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with, our mediums of communication have been revolutionized since the

internet

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can connect to anyone from any part of the world through phone calls,

video

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and video

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calls. Even we can

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share information using emails and text messages which is more easier, faster option than sending

mails

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due to

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the internet

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internet

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start-ups

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not

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to make

investment

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investments

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in their infrastructure by allowing their employees’ transportation

cost

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and time.

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technologies

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have impacted us

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apply

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maliciously in

same

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the same

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ways.

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, working from home or sitting in front of

computer

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a computer

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leads to

sedentary

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a sedentary

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lifestyle and obesity.

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This physical inactivities

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can make our body

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apply

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host for diseases like diabetes, cardiac attack and many more.

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, people

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experience

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mental fatigue by spending extensive

period

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of time in front of screens.

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but not least, people avoid outdoor exposure and locking themselves

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home. In conclusion, undoubtedly, there has been revolutionized change we experience in

personal

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our personal

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and professional

life

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lives

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by relying on

latest

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the latest

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technologies

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however

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, we

also

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need to encourage ourselves

for

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active

lifestyle

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lifestyles

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to stay healthy and fit.

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Provide more concrete examples to support your points. The examples given are rather generic and do not fully demonstrate a depth of understanding of the topic. Real-world illustrations or statistics can help strengthen your arguments.

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Strive for accuracy in grammar and vocabulary. Pay close attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, as errors in these areas can make your writing less clear and reduce its overall impact.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

263 words

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